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Artist-in-Residence at Chez Firth

Tuesday (1/12/10) 4:31pm - ... wherein Peter finishes draft two of the spec pilot

Okay, the second draft of the spec is out the door.

So you'll recall that in mid-November, I said, "Dammit, I'm writing a pilot spec."  Somehow, in spite of putting on improv shows, leaving town for Thanksgiving, and rollercoastering through the giant ALX/Wafflefest hootenanny, I had a first draft done by mid-December.

Then I spent three weeks getting sick, visiting family, and going to giant parties with improvisors(Note:  never simultaneously.)

This time around, I allocated myself 25 hours total to get from my first draft to my second one.  The first task was to reread the script and find the story problems that made me recoil in horror.  I did that, and found five really broken scenes.  I managed to fix four of them without much trouble, and I patched up the fifth as best as I could.  (In the end, I may just cut it.)

After that, I went through and polished.  I made the characters sound more like themselves.  I struggled to make the funny lines actually funny.  I fixed litlte logic problems.  I trimmed out unnecessary bits.  And so on.  It took about 20 hours total.

Anyway, now I've pulled the big lever and sent the spec pilot to Amy, to the guy who founded Sketchwar, and to Andrew's friend who wrote Playland.  Hopefully I'll start getting notes back in a week or so.

I've also checked in with the KOOP host about putting it on a future Writing on the Air episode, but no word back yet.  Hopefully I can get on there before the end of the One More Night run and give the SVT show a shameless plug.

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From:zinereem
Date:Tuesday (1/12/10) 4:53pm
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We could do a reading at the Hideout, too.
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From:hujhax
Date:Tuesday (1/12/10) 5:01pm
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w00t!
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From:wackyengineer
Date:Wednesday (1/13/10) 10:06pm
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I'd participate in a reading, if you need multiple actor-types.
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From:hujhax
Date:Wednesday (1/13/10) 10:21pm
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w00t!  Although keep in mind, for all you guys know, the script might suck....
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